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Councilor
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Act 9, Scene 2 is up. (And for such a short scene, it took an amazingly long time for me to write.)

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Edit: Also, I put up two new pages. The appearances page lists all the members who appear. I recommend reading the all the scenes before you look at it. The reviews page lists selective comments made by members in throughout topic. The review page is rather a gray area because so many of the comments are taken out of context. Both will be updated whenever I deem it necessary. Like when a new scene comes out or when someone says something interesting.

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OOC: Did Slartucker notice Dikiyoba's location? Does that answer yesterday's question? What does "OOC" stand for? Will Dikiyoba ever respond to a question with a direct answer? Have you ever seen a pink giraffe?

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Edit 2: Page 18 already!

[ Saturday, March 25, 2006 20:48: Message edited by: Dikiyoba ]
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Shock Trooper
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Are you implying that I'm in horrible shape and couldn't outrun anyone for very long? ...You're right.

Huh. Guess I didn't die at the hands of a random noob. I like being wrong.
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Law Bringer
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Wait... were A4's pylons ripped from Geneforge canon? In any case, that forum confused me.

I somehow get the feeling that I'm going to die soon. Is that kind of paranoia normal?

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Shaper
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quote:
Originally written by Dikiyoba:

What does "OOC" stand for?
Out of Charater.

Good stuff, I like the addition of the appearences page.

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I'll put a Spring in your step.
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Shaper
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Genius.

I couldn't have hoped to die a better death!

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Nikki: Then the noobs killed Sherbiebaby! First Nicothodes and then Sherbiebaby! Everyone that I secretly love is getting killed off in this war!
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Nikki: To declare my undying love to you, Arancaytar, my crazy kitten!
Posted because I'm egotistical, and, heck, I'm egotistical.

Oh, and I love the review page!

[ Sunday, March 26, 2006 06:10: Message edited by: Nikki xx ]

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And when you want to Live
How do you start?
Where do you go?
Who do you need to know?


*Name by Slarty, so blame him if it's filthy...
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Shaper
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Edit: Damn. Hit Quote instead of Edit.

[ Sunday, March 26, 2006 06:09: Message edited by: Nikki xx ]

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And when you want to Live
How do you start?
Where do you go?
Who do you need to know?


*Name by Slarty, so blame him if it's filthy...
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Master
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Aran? Sexy? AAH >_<;

Oh yea, it's nice as usual. I'm sure Spawner will be able to cause some confusion... and then when somebody dies they'll figure out that Spawner != Aran. :rolleyes:

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I have got to get a better line in the reviews section.

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Shock Trooper
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Geez... I wonder how many characters are going to be alive at the end of this script. Maybe none. :P

By the way, I love the part where Aran falls through the mirror.

(And wow, I'm dead. Now all I have to do is learn how to draw a comic strip so I can have my revenge... :cool: )
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Councilor
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Act 9, Scenes 3 and 4 are up. Apologies for the short length of both. My post will be long to compensate.

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Originally by Internal666hate:

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I have got to get a better line in the reviews section.
Anyone want to guess what the new line in the review section for Infernal666hate is?

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Originally by the Lurker:

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Now all I have to do is learn how to draw a comic strip so I can have my revenge...
Go right ahead. I would be most pleased. Archmage Alex hasn't followed through on his promised updating and Slartucker's taking a break, so there is a comic shortage.

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Originally by Wise Man:

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Aran? Sexy? AAH >_<
It's all Nikki's fault, not mine.

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Originally by Ephesos:

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Wait... were A4's pylons ripped from Geneforge canon?
Probably. Pylons haven't appeared in any previous Avernum game and they are common in the Geneforge games. I haven't run across any A4 pylons yet, though. My party's still debating whether to go to Fort Draco or not.

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Originally by Ephesos:

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I somehow get the feeling that I'm going to die soon. Is that kind of paranoia normal?
You've had this paranoia since the top of page 11 in this topic and you haven't died yet.

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Dikiyoba.

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Edit: Typo.

[ Sunday, March 26, 2006 13:02: Message edited by: Dikiyoba ]
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Master
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Holy crap, now the admins are dead. Why does this seem suddenly similar to stuff that Yoshiyuki Tomino writes? O_o;

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Law Bringer
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quote:
Originally written by Dikiyoba:

I haven't run across any A4 pylons yet, though. My party's still debating whether to go to Fort Draco or not.
You must not have explored Fort Monastary very well then. There is a pylon in the northwest corner. :P

quote:
Originally written by Wise Man:

Holy crap, now the admins are dead. Why does this seem suddenly similar to stuff that Yoshiyuki Tomino writes? O_o;
I was thinking George R.R. Martin, myself, but it amounts to the same thing.

[ Sunday, March 26, 2006 17:09: Message edited by: Tyranicus ]

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quote:
Originally written by Tyranicus:

quote:
Originally written by Dikiyoba:

I haven't run across any A4 pylons yet, though. My party's still debating whether to go to Fort Draco or not.
You must not have explored Fort Monastary very well then. There is a pylon in the northwest corner. :P

Not to mention Hrickis, Kravvit-Bok, and everywhere west of Fort Remote. In fact, surrounding far too many of the high-level villains in the game.

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I hate undead. I really, really, really, really hate undead. With a passion.
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quote:
Originally written by Tyranicus:

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quote:
Originally written by Wise Man:

Holy crap, now the admins are dead. Why does this seem suddenly similar to stuff that Yoshiyuki Tomino writes? O_o;
I was thinking George R.R. Martin, myself, but it amounts to the same thing.

It reminds me of Martin too. Especially the episodes when admins are killed just as they figure out how to win the war, because Aran dropped his key when he fought Spawner, while the newbies fooled by Spawner rebell, killing their commander.

Considering that there are only a couple forums left and at least 28 members left to kill, I suspect next few scenes will feature a couple huge explosions, followed by paragraph-long lists of names.

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Be careful with a word, as you would with a sword,
For it too has the power to kill.
However well placed word, unlike a well placed sword,
Can also have the power to heal.
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Originally by Tyranicus:

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You must not have explored Fort Monastary very well then. There is a pylon in the northwest corner.
I meant the ones that attack you. My party has explored Fort Monastary, at least.

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Originally written by Wise Man:

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Holy crap, now the admins are dead. Why does this seem suddenly similar to stuff that Yoshiyuki Tomino writes?
Perhaps, but I've been killing characters off since the very beginning. I'm not waiting until the end.

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Dikiyoba has completed Act 9, Scene 5. There's not too much more to add to the script. Hang in there for just a little while longer.

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Edit: Added a paragraph.

[ Sunday, March 26, 2006 19:41: Message edited by: Dikiyoba ]
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Not meaning to be picky, but Act 9 scene 4 begins with a unneeded '8'.

So far act 9 is showing a good deal more complexity in some ways than previous ones. On the whole it looks very good. I hope to see an increase in the number of fluffy turtles as the focus of attention moves closer to the general forum.

Edit: Removed a typo of my own.

[ Monday, March 27, 2006 04:44: Message edited by: Niemand ]

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Originally by Niemand:

quote:
Not meaning to be picky, but Act 9 scene 4 begin with a unneeded '8'.
Dikiyoba can't even comprehend how or why that 8 got there and lived for so long. It's gone now, though.

Edit: Typos deserve no mercy.

[ Sunday, March 26, 2006 20:20: Message edited by: Dikiyoba ]
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quote:
Dikiyoba: Typos deserve no mercy.
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Act 9, Scene 5: Kelandon: Delicious Vlish! Get out of their!
Kill it!

I wonder why the typos in Kelandon's lines are the ones that stand out most?
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I figured that they were because of the time he hit his head on that rock, so they showed that it was really a serious injury. I'm probably wrong, though.

Oh, and I guess I died already. Ah well, it was a good life.

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quote:
Originally written by Redstart:

quote:
Act 9, Scene 5: Kelandon: Delicious Vlish! Get out of their!
Kill it!

There is no typo. Kelandon meant to say "Get out of their exlamation mark," but Diki was lazy and only done a "!". :P

EDIT: Wtf? I thought Drakey was gone? (Regarding the story)

[ Sunday, March 26, 2006 22:13: Message edited by: Spring ]

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Dikiyoba edited the script and had him revived. Probably because there's a cooler way for him to die later.

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But I don't want to ride the elevator.
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I agree, act 9 has been very good stuff. Especially that line of Saunders which, once again, was beautiful.

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Finally, the A4 forum... I can do some damage there.

RETRIBUTION!!!

EDIT: As I've said before, I love my role in this... and I personally can't wait to bust out the Balms of Life at the end of the war. I mean, if the noobs can revive their troops and/or turn them into zombies, why can't we cast Return Life?!

Come to think of it, once we hit the A4 forum, I wouldn't even need Balms of Life anymore. My SP would increase tenfold, and I could just cast Return Life until everyone was back...

[ Monday, March 27, 2006 13:47: Message edited by: Ephesos ]

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Gamble with Gaea, and she eats your dice.

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It's really too bad I don't live to see how it ends.

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Act 10, Scene 1 is up. It's much longer than the last scene. But here's another long post anyway.

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Edit: I'm going to be pretty busy tomorrow, so don't expect the next scene tomorrow. (I'll still be on the boards, of course.) Even if I do get a scene out, it's likely to be very short.

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On the small chance that some of you missed it:

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I changed the last 6 or 7 lines of Scene 4 and rewrote most of Scene 5. (Sorry. Now you have to reread it. I apologize.)
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Originally by Student of Trinity:

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It's really too bad I don't live to see how it ends.
Just because you're dead doesn't mean you have to stop reading, you know.

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Does anyone know when GoldenKing gets back? He's missing the best part.

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Originally by Ephesos:

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As I've said before, I love my role in this.
Why does Dikiyoba have the sudden, overwhelming urge to laugh madly?

[ Monday, March 27, 2006 16:16: Message edited by: Dikiyoba ]
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