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Lifecrafter
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Page 21!!!!!!
W00T!!!!!!!!!

EDIT:
Post 300!!!!!
W00T AGAIN!!!

[ Monday, April 03, 2006 10:01: Message edited by: Infernal666hate ]

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quote:
Originally written by Dikiyoba:

The script is now finished. Read and then discuss. You may list your favorite line, your reaction to the latest scene, things that could be done to improve the script, or suggest a more preferable way to die. Go.

Dikiyoba.

A fitting conclusion. The fact that we knew that everybody would die removed most of suspense from final battle, but that was probably unavoidable. Overall, it was a pretty fun, and at times very funny, script.

quote:
Originally written by Dintiradan:

By Zephyr Tempest:
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Anyway...will there be some cheesy plot device that brings everyone back to life for a sequel?
There had better be. The Evil Overlord always inexplicably returns in a sequel.
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You meant something like this?

A dark figure walks through the piles of bodies littering General forum. In his hands is a small potion of what looks like liquid light.

Dintiradan: It’s good that I had a clone of myself made before these problems started. And I even have some Balm of Life to get my Legion of Terror started again. A good Evil Overlord always comes back. MUAHAHAHA

Seeing the body of Zephyr Tempest, Dintiradan bends down.

Dintiradan: A mage... He would probably make a good underling. Let’s see how this works.

Dintiradan pours some Balm of Life onto Zephyr Tempest’s well-preserved body and the entire body begins to glow with the same light as the bottle. Soon the body begins to move, opens its eyes and gets up.

Zephyr Tempest: What happened? Where is the Ur-Noob? Why is everybody dead?

Dintiradan: It doesn’t matter. The main thing is that you are the first member of my new Legion of Terror.

Dintiradan2: You mean MY new legion of terror.

Dintiradan: Who are you? Another clone? How many more are out there?

Dintiradan2: You don’t have to worry about others. I’ve destroyed the cloning machinery and now I just have to get rid of you to remain the only Evil Overlord in the world.

Dintiradan2 fires Ultimate Weapon of Doom at Dintiradan, instantly evaporating him. The bottle with Balm of Life falls to the ground and shatters, with its contents disappearing in a flash of light the moment magical container is broken.

Zephyr Tempest: Balm of Life! You’ve destroyed it! I will never let your evil take over the world.

Zephyr Tempest casts an Ice Bolt, hitting Ultimate Weapon of Doom. Resulting explosion kills both Dintiradan2 and Zephyr Tempest himself.


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Master
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quote:
Originally written by Infernal666hate:

Page 21!!!!!!
W00T!!!!!!!!!

EDIT:
Post 300!!!!!
W00T AGAIN!!!

Someone got canned for doing that. Only he did it twice, I guess...

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In no particular order (except for the final paragraph):

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Originally by Ephesos:

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And I half expected SPOILER.
No! Bad Ephesos! Don't even think about it!

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I made a few final updates to the story. The appearances page has been cleaned up, Aran has earned a different review, the blatant ad photo has been updated, Spy-there's gender has been corrected, and I've added a links page. The links page is mainly for me and isn't finished yet.

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There may be a few useful (or many or none) comments left, but I think this topic has fulfilled its purpose. Please allow it to retire peacefully without throwing spam at it.

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I've cleared my signature, so here is the link to the script. It can also be found in my profile. SpiderWeb: Attack of the Noobs If anyone does have any suggestions, I am open to minor changes (say, getting a better dying line or fixing a typo).

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Originally by Archmage Alex:

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And I'll remember to update my site this week! I swear!
Dikiyoba is holding you to that this time. Dikiyoba has no idea how, but Dikiyoba will think of something if it proves necessary.
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Guardian
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quote:
Originally written by Zeviz:

Zephyr Tempest casts an Ice Bolt, hitting Ultimate Weapon of Doom. Resulting explosion kills both Dintiradan2 and Zephyr Tempest himself.
Ahhhhhh, much better! I died in an explosion I caused myself! Huzzah!

Although, that comment made me sound insane.

[ Monday, April 03, 2006 21:20: Message edited by: Zephyr Tempest. ]

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Guardian
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Yes, something like that. Though usually the conflict is made to last from one and a half to two hours.

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Shaper
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I'd just like to applaud Dikiyobiaria for a truly amazing script. I could spew exposition at you, and heck, you might even like it, but I'll refrain from doing so.

Anyways, congratulations on getting me to focus my attention on an internet-thingy(tm) for more than a few days.

Word out.

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Law Bringer
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quote:
Originally written by Kid:
A xx:
I could spew exposition at you, and heck, you might even like it, but I'll refrain from doing so.
I'm a little confused as to what this would look like... but I imagine that it would be very unpleasant.

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Very nice Dikyoba. Amazing read. Pity I had to die, but hey, I survived for a LONG time compared to everyone else.

Just one thing: You've ogt my name spelt wrong in Act 8 or 9. It's no biggie, but thought I'd mention it anyway. There's no "h" in my name.

So yeah: "Can't wait to see your next script"

- Archmagus Micael

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Originally by Archmagus Micael:

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Just one thing: You've ogt my name spelt wrong in Act 8 or 9. It's no biggie, but thought I'd mention it anyway. There's no "h" in my name.
Sorry about that. I think the mispelling was in Act 7 and I think I've fixed it now.

Originally by Nikki:

quote:
...Dikiyobiaria...
What inspired this name, and why? Dikiyoba can't put it on the list of acceptable name variations until Dikiyoba has an explanation for it.
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Raven v. Writing Desk
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quote:
Originally written by Dikiyoba:

What inspired this name, and why? Dikiyoba can't put it on the list of acceptable name variations until Dikiyoba has an explanation for it.
You know, I'm tempted to start my own, democratic list of Dikiyoba name variations, including names without explanations ;)

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quote:
Originally written by Dikiyoba:

Originally by Nikki:

quote:
...Dikiyobiaria...
What inspired this name, and why? Dikiyoba can't put it on the list of acceptable name variations until Dikiyoba has an explanation for it.

I dunno. I don't ever plan for things like this. But I CAN make something up... Dikiyobiaria came about because

a) I wanted it to.
b) It sounds funny.
c) I was bored, and couldn't find any pictures of a kitten plowing bowls.

Hope that's satisfactory.

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How do you start?
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"Indeed, sir, if your metaphor stink, I will stop my nose; or against any man's metaphor. Prithee, get thee further."
-- Shakespeare

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Originally by Nikki:

quote:
I dunno. I don't ever plan for things like this. But I CAN make something up... Dikiyobiaria came about because

a) I wanted it to.
b) It sounds funny.
c) I was bored, and couldn't find any pictures of a kitten plowing bowls.

Hope that's satisfactory.
Dikiyoba will say that it's good enough. It does sound funny...
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Shaper
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Well done, Dikijklmnopqrstuvwxyz.

I liked the ending.

[ Thursday, April 06, 2006 01:18: Message edited by: Spring ]

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:D aww! I knew that poison would do it. Though I rather had the idea to saturate the Spiderwebbers' skin with poison ...
On the other hand I was completely wrong when I expected JV's appearance <_<

You deserve an Oscar for the best scenario, Dikiyoba.
And, um ... it's Averforge, not Avernumforge.

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Wow. That's pretty cool.

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Well, here we go again. I'm bringing this topic out of retirement. Curse these inevitable sequels!

Edit: Official Episode 2 thread moved to here.

[ Saturday, April 22, 2006 16:00: Message edited by: Dikiyoba ]
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How many times am I going to die? :P

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