Intro text: "you say an ad"

What's with the lava right next to the portal?

In the first town, I ask questions like _Why are you so nervous?_
The _ is only turned into a " for responses, not questions, so it looks
wrong.

You sometimes spell Rentar as Rhentar eg in the first town.

The woodcutter has a sentence split between two paragraphs, which looks
ugly.

When I talk to some random townsperson, I get a dialog for killing the
undead in the storeroom.

Alfonso: He never tells me his name, but after killing the undead in
the storeroom I somehow find out.
"level 35 party" - Characters should not know that sort of number.
Also, that response is too big to fit in the box it's in.
He says to try to walk into the walls south of the undead wall. Those
are hills or something, not walls! Remember that he is a character in
the scenario, not someone writing a hintbook.

The wizard and the slith avatar died in the fight. The important
characters should have masses of hitpoints, huge resistance to
everything and scripts that keep them healthy, so they don't
accidentally die. (or make them invulnerable)

Cave is exactly square - unnatural. The road out of it just suddenly
stops.

Random outdoor combat is too frequent, and against monsters way weaker
than the recommended level.

Vahnvoi blademaster hits ridiculously hard (thousands of damage)

I used some automated tools to help search for things that are wrong,
and came up with the following

Spelling errors:
ending.txt: "Ofcourse", "enough,and you dont" (should have space after
comma, and dont should be don't), "aquired" should be "acquired",
o4.txt: "impresive" should be "impressive"
o7.txt: "definetely" -> "definitely"
odditiesout.txt: "recipies" -> "recipes"
onewalluv.txt: "wierd" -> weird
pitvahn.txt: "immediatly" -> immediately, "nerously" -> nervously
rolareep.txt: "Ofcourse", "propositiory" is not a word, "speacks",
"hten", rolareepdlg.txt: "equiptment", "excersice", "excercises",
succesiom", "beleived", "Vahnvoi" (should be "Vahnavoi"),
rolarkeyvoi.txt: "Vahnvoi Baldesmaster""
sloeva.txt: "slimess", "existance"
t0maggrove.txt: "frome"
t0maggrovedlg.txt: "skils","traveled","traveling", "itf","youselves",
t11Rahversai.txt: "prescence"
t1smallcave.txt: "ebough"
t1smallcavedlg.txt: "releived", "Ofcourse","definetely", "actully",
"beter","gratefull"
t3firsttow.txt: "griamce", "securtiy", "beleive", "corrdior",
"mis-trust" is one word, not hyphenated, "traveled", "ofcourse"
traversai.txt: "TRAVERSAI" looks stupid in all caps, but if that's what
you want, be consistent and do it like that everywhere.
undeadvalley.txt: "storeromms"
undeadvalleydata.txt: "Vahnvoi", "Blademaster" - you normally say
"bladesmaster". Make up your mind.


Script errors:

In two places you use set_sdf. This is not actually a call. You
should be using set_flag instead (If you also use get_flag instead of
get_sdf, you won't get confused) Files where you have this are:
Boom.txt, Tick.txt.

Boom.txt:
You have "flip_terrain(my_loc_x(384),my_loc_y(385));" - the numbers
shouldn't be there.

windpit.txt, t3firsttow.txt, t8bridge.txt, rolareep.txt, onwalluv.tzt,
o9.txt, odditiesout.txt, maze.txt, hidarea.txt and magout.txt have two
breaks at the end.

maze.txt line 21: You have three strings in a message_dialog

rolareep.txt, line 56 or so - you don't have a break between states 21
and 57.

t1smallcave.txt, t11Rahversai.txt, t15vahnspiral.txt - missing
semicolon after the variable list.

t15vahnspiral.txt: you have BEGINSTATE in all caps. I think this is
actually okay, but I'm not sure.

t1smallcave: You have Break instead of break on line 49 (end of state
15)

o4.txt, line 50, "if (get_flag(77,7) = 1)" should be "if
(get_flag(77,7) == 1)"

Entering the supply depot from the west side takes me to the east side
of the town. Also, why would bread just be left outside? It would go
off in a few days, and be rained on, and stolen by animals, and so on.

The First Tower is a really bad name for a town.

If I stand in the gate for the tower wall (outdoors) then enter the
tower by going SE, then leave by going SW, I end up stuck in a wall.

In cutscene, my character said "Are you thinking what I'm thinking?"
then "Probably". Am I talking to myself? And I don't know what I'm
thinking.

"How did they penetrate security?" By walking through the open door
guarded only by a single weak skeleton, probably :-p

Talking to Gromlaka: HIDDEN CITY in capitals looks silly, he doesn't
explain how he knows about it, he mentions another scenario, and the
text is a bit too long for the box.

Bladesmaster's sword is way too powerful.

Obelisk in room south of Gromlaka can't be read.

When I enter the tower, there is the sound of something being destroyed
by a laser.

On locked doors: "your hnd near"

What's with the weird floating things? Why are they there?

The trap with the crystal and all the power globes that zap with
lightning is very annoying - it takes ages to resolve. Yes, the taking
ages is a consequence of the Blades engine and pausing to play sounds,
but that doesn't mean you should keep it as it is.

When I leave the tower by the back, I can walk round the outside and
end up at the front entrance.

Gate with all the feeble skeletons - for me to get this far, I have to
be powerful enough that skeletons are only an annoyance who take a long
time to kill.

I don't need to go through the Vahnatai wall - if I go north along the
outside, I end up on the other side. (And I can get back by going
south)

Hidden City boots are called "Object" when unidentified.

Those traps are so annoying, even if the sound is off. If there were
only about four charging blobs instead of dozens, you'd get the cool
effect without driving people insane. And it would look better, too.

In the Winding Wall, I can get very close to the north and south edges,
but then it says I can't be bothered going further. Why?

Going to the Vahnatai port - if I try to go in, it says I don't want to
fight a million guard to get to a storeroom. But I don't know it's a
storeroom. The sign said it was a port, and it looks like one.


Tunnel in Vahnatai lands. I should go in before I get the message
about what's there.

It would be cool if killing the keepers made the demons leave control
and attack everyone

When I go through the tunnel, going back the other way takes me to the
wrong side.

The raised bridge to Rolar-Tel's fort just looks wrong.

Rolar-Tel's fort: If I stay outside and follow the wall south, I end
up past the fort. If I go north, same problem.

Rolar-Tel - I'm supposed to talk to him, but I have to break down loads
of barriers and doors to see him. Also, the conversation has my
questions _like this_, which doesn't work right.

You have sentences split between paragraphs again.

I didn't get the Rolar-Tel cutscene until I came in, spoke to him, left
and came in again.

There are too many unlabelled levers. Rolar should have told me which
to pull. Two of the levers don't do anything, I can't pull them.

Going back into the spiral (after fixing the script error that stops
it) still doesn't work, as move_to_new_town only works if you are
already in a town. This script is still called if I go there first,
while looking for a way past the first wall.

Town - The First Tower:
X-9, Y-25 = This room contains eight crystal boxes. Each box contains an
“Archer's Bow” Being that the group can be a maximum of four characters it
would be nice to have different weapons/armor/objects in each box.

X-9, Y-15 = A message pops up saying a Vahnatai is coming, but there is
none. Also there is a blank obelisk (though that may be intentional)

X-35, Y-33 = After speaking with Rentar's Shade he never goes hostile. I
assume this to be intentional, but it seems there should be a battle.

Town - Vahantai Wall:
X-16, Y-21 = I killed the Vahantai and got the following massage: “Error,
the game just faille to load this graphic: sheet 502, icon B”

If you walk to all the way to the north you are able to exit the town. This
puts you one the other side of a wall. I went back to try to enter from the
east, but the gate was closed and I couldn't get back in. Make it so the
north exit is in the same square as the east exit, so this wont happen.

Town - Winding Wall:
When I tried to exit to the west I got the following message: “You don't go
any further because all there is more walls” I walked all the way north and
was able to exit to the west. I went back into the town and did not get the
message there after.

Town - Rolar-Tel's Fort:
X-11, Y-38 = The guard skeletons at the front gate are friendly. Well many
things are friendly. Skeletons were fighting an invisible guardian, which
was apparently my allie (X-48, Y-24).

X-37, Y-28 = The Wisp of Rentar is friendly, but it has no dialogue. It's
labeled as neutral, so it doesn't do anything.

X-28, Y-15 = These Vahantai told me via a pop up message the Rolar-Tel
wanted to speak with me, but when I go to the door to where he is I get a
message that results in blocked entry (X-50, Y-38). Also I assume you want
these guards to stay at their post, they wander randomly. There is no other
way to get in.

Some general comments….

About Dialogue: When you want to put something in quotes type it as
_example_ it will show up as “example”. Also you can have multiple dialogue
stings in the same state. You probably don't need to be told this, but it
was common throughout you dialogue that the person would have to go back to
the start of the conversation to pick a different option.

About Towns: You need to define entrance/exit points. In several towns it
is possible to leave from places the player shouldn't be able to. The
result is getting stuck places, or not being able to get back in the town.

About Land: There is a lot of open space, trees, rocks, dirt, water,
abandoned buildings, anything would be help.