What is your alls problem (I'm not mad anymore)
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Guardian
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written Sunday, May 2 2004 16:03
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Go ahead and e-mail the story to me, Slasher. -------------------- Entertaining songs !Click here to get to the misc. boards! Attack, icons, attack!THIS PAGE ROCKS!! Vicious virus stalks the web, has already infected over 200 computers: read more! "AH-CHOO!" -George Washington Posts: 1779 | Registered: Monday, December 9 2002 08:00 |
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Agent
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written Sunday, May 2 2004 16:34
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quote:Instead of having this topic becoming a spam fest of comments, you should private message Slasher instead. That means check your private messages Slasher. -------------------- Live teh fez. Posts: 1233 | Registered: Wednesday, October 3 2001 07:00 |
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Law Bringer
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written Sunday, May 2 2004 16:39
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You could have checked the old list of interested parties. That would have been one large, easy batch to send out. But whatever floats your boat... ?Alorael, who is also still interested, and whose email address is still in his profile and still rather obvious. Posts: 14579 | Registered: Saturday, December 1 2001 08:00 |
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Shock Trooper
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written Sunday, May 2 2004 20:02
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Ahh, good, I have recieved it as well. Thanks. Oh, by the way, I'm Fresh/RC/GC. Posts: 203 | Registered: Saturday, July 19 2003 07:00 |
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Agent
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written Monday, May 3 2004 11:18
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I'll get it to all of you as soon as I can. Currently I'm away from my E-mail. And by the way GremlinChief I already know your Fresh.  -------------------- Espresso hasn't been invented yet. That stinks. Xian Skull- Avernum 3 Posts: 1287 | Registered: Thursday, August 14 2003 07:00 |
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written Monday, May 3 2004 11:58
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Please will any others use PMs? Thankee! -------------------- KazeArctica: Oh yes. KazeArctica: Oh YES Posts: 93 | Registered: Sunday, September 30 2001 22:00 |
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Warrior
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written Monday, May 3 2004 13:08
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I posted a while ago on the other board, but incase you forgot i wouldn't mind a copy, thanks. cookiiee_monster@hotmail.com -------------------- "This......is a TREE! What's it for?" -Exile III Posts: 75 | Registered: Saturday, December 20 2003 08:00 |
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Fire! Fire! Fire! Fire!
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written Monday, May 3 2004 17:09
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Waiting for reviews, people... PM me if you don't want Slasher to see it... -------------------- And though the musicians would die, the music would live on in the imaginations of all who heard it. -The Last Pendragon TEH CONSPIRACY IZ ALL In case of emergency, break glass. Posts: 3351 | Registered: Saturday, April 6 2002 08:00 |
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Off With Their Heads
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written Monday, May 3 2004 17:14
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I'm a little unclear. Is it okay to post reviews of it here, or should we PM Slasher? Sorry. I feel like this has been explained, but I'm not sure. -------------------- Kelandon's Pink and Pretty Page!! (The home of BoA's HLPM v1.1!) Rate my scenarios! Northern Kingdom 0: Prologue High Level Party Maker Posts: 7968 | Registered: Saturday, February 28 2004 08:00 |
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Law Bringer
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written Monday, May 3 2004 17:26
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A review here would be fine, although there is a fine line between criticism and flaming. I'd place that line at the constructive preceding criticism, myself. ?Alorael, who doesn't quite see what part of Saunders' plea was so hard to grasp. Whatever it was, The Red Book missed it completely. Posts: 14579 | Registered: Saturday, December 1 2001 08:00 |
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Off With Their Heads
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written Monday, May 3 2004 20:41
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Okay, then. It would be rather bizarre to flame him for sending a story by request. Just a few things, because I haven't made it very far in yet. First, nephils are traditionally (in Avernum, and I presume in Exile, too) cat people, not bird people. Second, it would probably be more correct to say that the sliths are humanoid lizards, not half-human and half-lizard. And woah... Anaximander's got a badass streak that he never showed in E3/A3. I always knew there was something pent up inside waiting to burst out. Anyway, this story looks like it shows potential more than it is a great story by itself. Keep writing, and you'll pen some cool stories someday soon. I will keep reading it and will post more thorough comments once I'm done. -------------------- Kelandon's Pink and Pretty Page!! (The home of BoA's HLPM v1.1!) Rate my scenarios! Northern Kingdom 0: Prologue High Level Party Maker Posts: 7968 | Registered: Saturday, February 28 2004 08:00 |
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Skip to My Lou
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written Wednesday, May 5 2004 11:24
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I agree with Kelandon that your story has good potential. My personal request would be more imagery and descriptive language. I, like many people, visualize things in my head as I read. I like to "see" the surrounding, "hear" the sounds, etc. It was a good story, but I think that you could further the enjoyability by lenthening your decriptions. (for a small example: "Three hours later the trio arrived to the small valley. There was an uninhabited canyon with a small pool in the middle." changed to something like "After three hours of hiking the rough, rocky mountain trails the trio arrived in the small, quiet valley. They could see a small brook flowing between the scattered trees and hear the light chattering of birds. In the distance, they could see the opening of an empty, shadowed canyon with a small pool bubbling in the middle.) -------------------- Need a pet? Need cheap labor? Buy a Moose! Take the Personality Test! INTJ 100% 78% 44% 44% Huzzah for the Masterminds! Posts: 1629 | Registered: Wednesday, October 3 2001 07:00 |
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Post Navel Trauma ^_^
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written Wednesday, May 5 2004 11:34
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quote:Did you ever look into Exile 3 with ResEdit? -------------------- Grammar wenches beware: This is the house that the malt that the rat that the cat that the dog that the cow that the maiden that the man that the priest that the cock that the farmer kept waked married kissed milked tossed worried killed ate lay in. My Website BoA BetterEditor for MacOS X desperance.net - Leave your sanity at the door Posts: 1798 | Registered: Thursday, October 4 2001 07:00 |
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Guardian
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written Wednesday, May 5 2004 12:11
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Um, Slasher...maybe you didn't see my post the first time, but... I still want a copy of the story. -------------------- Entertaining songs !Click here to get to the misc. boards! Attack, icons, attack!THIS PAGE ROCKS!! Vicious virus stalks the web, has already infected over 200 computers: read more! "AH-CHOO!" -George Washington Posts: 1779 | Registered: Monday, December 9 2002 08:00 |
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Post Navel Trauma ^_^
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written Wednesday, May 5 2004 12:21
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quote:tl, dr -------------------- Grammar wenches beware: This is the house that the malt that the rat that the cat that the dog that the cow that the maiden that the man that the priest that the cock that the farmer kept waked married kissed milked tossed worried killed ate lay in. My Website BoA BetterEditor for MacOS X desperance.net - Leave your sanity at the door Posts: 1798 | Registered: Thursday, October 4 2001 07:00 |
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Infiltrator
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written Wednesday, May 5 2004 13:53
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I thought the story could use a bit more development, but I enjoyed reading it. I'm having one of those weeks where I can really identify with Throg. Posts: 437 | Registered: Sunday, July 13 2003 07:00 |
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Master
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written Wednesday, May 5 2004 14:01
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quote:now i am certain that you lack the mental capacity to process one line of information. -------------------- Urban wisdom is not actual wisdom. It's more like the seemingly philosophical statements that sometimes leak out of my strange mind through my mouth, or in the case of message boards, my hands. -------------------- Clan Xeon - Warcraft III clan Polaris - Weather Balloons YAY Undead Theories - Don't Ask, Don't Tell Posts: 3323 | Registered: Thursday, April 25 2002 07:00 |
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Warrior
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written Friday, May 7 2004 02:26
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Originally written by Saunders: quote:Sorry i didn't seem to see your request there, must have passed it by. I still don't understand why but i realise now that my next post completely bypassed your request, eck! As for the story i'm working though it slowly but so far so good, although i agree that a tinge more description would really add more to it. -------------------- "This......is a TREE! What's it for?" -Exile III Posts: 75 | Registered: Saturday, December 20 2003 08:00 |
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Agent
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written Friday, May 7 2004 12:20
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I thought I sent it to you Z.T. I'll send it as soon as I can. -------------------- Espresso hasn't been invented yet. That stinks. Xian Skull- Avernum 3 Posts: 1287 | Registered: Thursday, August 14 2003 07:00 |
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